Overall very good.
You do a very good job with animating fight scenes, but the dialogue was a bit awkward at some moments, like the part between Kenny's dialogues, "Do you think you can [something] punch?" and "No you can't," there was a drawn out pause that took too long, especially since Kenny took a few seconds teleporting. Play around with pacing the dialogues as you did with the fight scenes. Shorten the time they remain on screen for quick actions and have characters act simultaneously with the longer dialogues for the more clam periods. Perhaps you can even experiment with a few scenes where, instead of showing the actual dialogue, you let the audience guess what the characters say/think through their actions.
Another couple of things that bothered me a little was the minor mistakes in spelling and grammar usage. Also, all the characters spoke the same way as if they were all one person.
I'm looking forward to the second episode.
This is great work.
A lot of the sounds were a bit off from the action, though. Also, the sounds should be manipulated a little, so they are not as sharp. Some battle music would be great as well. Hope you make a continuation of this.
Anyone ever notice that the bodies never actually turns? they are always facing left.
Its a good start.
Your flash went by a little too fast. You should try to make the objects move smotthly instead of appearing here then appearing there. More effort needs to be put into animation, though you did an ok job with the art. Keep going.
You have great ideas for shorts.
But you need to practice drawing a little more. There is not much of an improvement throughout your submissions.
sry what do u expect from a 2 year old
There is a section called an art portal...
Great first animation!
Develop a story for your mario kirby. Try to give all your characters different personalities so they all act differently and unexpectantly (even to you). Keep it up. You're going to be one of the top sprite animators in no time!
I'll try my best =)
The timing of the words were a bit off. They moved away before the guy sung the words. Also, don't have the words come to a sudden stop. Try to create a smooth feeling as with the song. You should also try doing the entire song, not just a small section.
The part where Mario and Luigi come into the movie has a slight mistake. The background makes it look like they are running backwards. Also, you seem to be a decent artists. Maybe you should try drawing your own characters instead of using sprites.
Dude you are going to be one of the best in no time. Only problems were the guy's flip being to fast and the guy thrown in the air hanging a little too long. Keep it up!
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