Nice song.
When I listened and read the past reviews, I saw a waveline ~~~~~~~... Thats the only way I can draw it on here... :3 I think the song will be better if you modify that "bam" instrument to make the song from ~~~~ to v^v^v^v^... Yea... Forget I even wrote this review...
~Depes Hales~
Its the bass, not the sound. But the bass has to be loud, due to the purpose of the song
Very nice song...
I see...
Panting, the two brothers take a quick break before continuing on to the arena, the makeshift fortress of the evil demon that had devastated many people's lives.
"Good thing you found this talisman eh?" Garn asked.
"Good? You're a pain in the ass!" Ferrel replies. They joked and laughed for a few more minutes before picking up their soul stealing swords. They walked towards the gate of the arena and two minor demons in the bodies of past heroes appear.
"Mortals! Do you wish to die?" one of them asks.
"Nah, I'm pretty sure that's your job," Garn taunts. Shouting their battle cires, the minor demons charge at Ferrel and Garn. The sword dance continued for an hour before Ferrel successfully cut off the arm of the demon he was fighting.
"Argh!" the demon sceramed. Parrying and backing up towards the arena's wall, the demon realized that he would not live. With a look of despair, the demon screamed again when Ferrel cut off his leg when the demon was stopped by the arena's wall. Ferrel then used his sword's ability. A giant black hand shot out of the blade and pulled the demon's soul out of his body into the blade, the demon screaming as he is pulled in. Grinning, Ferrel called to Garn.
"You done playing with him, Garn?"
"Aw. I was just starting to sweat!" Garn yelled back. Garn grinned as he went astray from his usual fighting style and feinted a strike to the demons head. He then quickly ducked to cut the demon in half. Realizing his critical mistake, the demon knew then that he would not live either.
"Please don't kill me! I'll help you take down Lord Natam!" he pleaded desperately.
"Nah, I won't kill you. You'll be having some fun with some new friends in this blade." The demon's eyes widened as Garn's sword pulled him into the sword. He went without so much as a shout. Still grinning, the brothersopen up the gate. As they enter the arena, they are immediately surrounded by an army of minor demons and a voice suddenly boomed out of nowhere.
"WHO ART THOU?! DO THEE HAVE A DEATHWISH?"
"C'mon Natam. It's your old buddies, Garn and Ferrel." Garn joked. Hearing a low growl, Garn and Ferrel take a cautious step back.
"BEGONE MY SLAVES! I SHALL TAKE CARE OF THY ENEMIES!" The army then flared up to return to the netherworld. A huge column of fire then erupted from the middle of the arena. When it stopped erupting, a huge demon was there to take its place.
"Thou art brave. Hath thou written thy will?" Natam asked.
"Nope, but we'll be glad to write yours," Garn again joked. Suddenly, the demon spit a fireball at Ferrel and Garn. They jump out of the way at the last second and run towards the demon. Roaring, the demon swings its tail at Garn and struck at Ferrel with its obsidian talons. The fight continued for what seemed an eternity when Garn misplaces a foot from fatigue and is hit by the demon's tail. As fast as lightning, the demon shot towards Garn as he flew and hit the wall.
"NO!" Ferrel yelled. He then ran towards the demon but stopped when Natam turned his head towards him. In his mouth was the blood covered talisman that kept Garn alive. Ferrel's eyes widening, the demon bites down and crushes the talisman, one last scream escaping from Garn's mouth. Enraged, Ferrel rushes at the demon and blindly assualts him. Moving aside from one side, the demon spits a fireball at Ferrel's arm. Wincing, Ferrel continued his mad sword dance. After a few hours of fighting, Ferrel manages to slice the demon's belly. Natam screams and Ferrel takes advantage, continuing to cut the demon to shreds. In agony, the demon gives one last shout "I MA NATAS!" at the cut to his throat. Natam's body flares up in front of Ferrel and the demon is then reduced to nothing but a pile of ash. Ferrel then walks over to his only and, now dead, family.
"I can't live without you, my brother," he whispers, "Might as well join you in hell." Raising his sword for one last time, Ferrel slashes open his throat. His body now awash with blood from many, falls over and the light of light fades from Ferrel's eyes...
Great song.
~Depes Hales~
my gawd man...
and to think that i wus just messing around here and there with a few strings to make a rap song dedicated to the 100 people who placed me on favorites list. I never knew how much this particular track ment to any one
AWSOME story
this has got to be the greatest review i have ever recieved in my entire life
drove to the point were some one would throw an entire story scene..
(2 scenes to be exact)
T_T
and why did Garn had to die...
i liked him T____T
Great song.
I see...
Hoding a flower, Sam wonders if he should ask Jill out. Looking at the flower, he picks away at the petals, tearing himself up by telling himself why she would like him and why she wouldn't like him. After what seemed like an eternity, Sam comes to a decision.
"Yes," he thinks, "I will do it." Running to Jill's house inexcitement, he notices that Jill is talking to what most girls at school think is the hottest guy. Sam stands to rethink his choice and wonders if he should still keep it a secret.
"NO! I have kept this secret for four years! I will not, CANNOT, keep this a secret anymore!" he decides. Again he runs to Jill and pushes aside Jake, the "hot" guy.
"Hey! What the fuck?!" Jake yells.
"Jill, I have something important to tell you!" Sam says.
"Um... What is it, Sam?" asks Jill.
"I... I... lo-"
"Hurry up already!" Jake interrupts.
"I LOVE YOU, JILL!!!!" Sam screams. For a few moments, there was nothing but silence and Jill and Jake with their mouths wide open. Suddenly, Jill hugs Sam tightly.
"Really?!?!?!" Jill asks.
"Y... Yes."
"And to think that this whole time I thought you weren't the least bit interested in me." Immediately, Sam and Jill begin kissing each other and repeating over and over again how they feel. With his hopes crushed, Jake walks back to his car to drive away with a lonely heart...
Can you make the beggining a lil louder plz? Its a great song tho.
~Depes Hales~
I love the story.
...Make the beginning louder? The quiet beginning is all part of the metaphor, depes. I wouldn't ever be able to bring myself to change it.
I appreciate your thoughtful response, depes.
The modern age...
As the robot of the month, JD-153 receives an award most robots only dream of getting. A full AI brain. Breathing in the air through his artificial nostrils, JD walks up a hill to watch the sun rise. Closing his eyes, JD welcomes the warmth of the sun and the wonder of being able to dream... to wonder.... to be free from the horrid life of being a slave to the humans... To soon, it seemed, when the sun finally sunk beneath the ever daunting mountains that block all robots from their freedoms. Finally opening his eyes, JD looks around to make sure the humans have not come yet. Opening up his chest, JD removes the tracking device.
"It is pointless," JD's conscience tells him, "Many have tried already, and all of them have failed."
"No," JD fights back, "Each generation evolves in thought and intelligence. I will not fail like the others." JD then walks up and starts walking towards the only thing that keeps him away from true freedom.
Great song. Keep it up.
~Depes Hales~
whow, really nice story :) I can Imagine that when I listen to this song.
thanks for the ten too!
This is a very good song.
The three weary travelers slowly walk up the final steps. Steps that have rarely stepped on by mankind. As they climb the final obstacle to the tip of the Himalayas, they think back on many lost friends that have died trying to achieve the greatest reward of all adventurers. Stepping onto the barren, windy, white ground of the very top, they all gasp in wonder as they finally take in what they have just done.
"We are on top of the world!" they all think. They shed their goggles for just a few moments to view the wonder from the very top. After a couple of hours basking in the life filling sun, they decide to climb back down. They think of how they will tell their stories and how they will be marked as one of the few people to ever climb to the very top. The trio then comes to a stop at a daunting cliff.
"We made it to the top, but how are we going to make it back down?" one of them thinks. Still cheerful, the three survivors been their climb down.
Great song.
~Deps Hales~
I think you've written a really nice story, I certainly can Imagine that! Thanks for writing :) and thanks for the ten!
Great song...
I see...
Climbing up the steps towards the gate, the battered and sleep deprived knight raises his sword. Seeing the two guards, daggers suddenly appear in his hand and in the next second are in the guards' throats. The knight then opens the tall, mocking gates to the castle. The wicked king of hell, surprised to see him still alive, draws his sword. People around back off, forming a circular arena for the enraged knight and the angry king. "No," thinks the king, "He has bested my best warrior. My SON!" Suddenly, the king charges. Resisting the urge to kill the king outright, the knight easily parries each blow, then striking whenever a vulnerable spot appeared in the king's mad sword dance. Slowly giving the king many cuts as to torture him, the knight recalls every friend, every ally, every mistress that was slain by the king of hell. "997, 998, 999,..." the knight counts. Given 999 cuts, the king falls to his knees.
"End this madness!" shouts the king, "You have given me more wounds than I have inflicted in my life! Or is it because you and I are alike? You must satisfy your thirst of blood, MY blood, by draining every last little drop of blood from my veins?!"
"No," answers the knight, "You and I will never be alike. I give a wound for each soul you have taken from my life."
"Bah! You just don't have the heart to take a life! Your a weakling, a pathetic excuse for a knight!" The knight then brings his sword to the king's neck.
"At least I have a heart, you merciless monster. This last cut shall be for my brother's last heartbeat." Closing his eyes, he swipes his sword across the neck. The king gasps his last breathe and falls, blood dripping from the many inflicted wounds and from his mouth. The many persons surrounding the knight and the body of the king begin cheering.
"Hurrah! Hurrah! May the wicked king burn for all eternity!" One woman notices that the knight is walking away without so much as a single shout with the peasents. She runs over to him and places her hand on his shoulder.
"Where are you going, brave knight?" she asks.
"I have my vengence, but still it seems not enough. Perhaps it is the guilt in me that tortures me everyday. How I could have saved them. How I could have changed those days with simple choices I should have made." A tear rolls down his cheek at the last word. Before the woman could reply, the knight continues walking. He soon disappears in the distant horizan. Not knowing what to think, the woman walks back to celebrate the death of the king and the birth and end of a long awaited hero.
Cool story man! Like how you connect your writing :) Thanks for the review/story :D
Again with the great songs...
Ok thats it, I am adding you as one of my favorite artists. I hope I was the 101st dalmation. ;)
~Depes Hales~
Rofl! 101 Dalmatians, really clever dude srsly.
Anyways thanks a lot man i really appreciate it.
BTW, i dont think you were :( Soz
This is a great song.
This song actually placed such a vivid picture in my mind that I decided to go animate it. Sorry, but I never finish my projects. :p
But heres what I see as best as I can describe it:
Some guy with a freaky wide grin is walking and the camera stays focused on him... Things around him interact with every beat in the song such as peices of land suddenly rising out of the ground and going back inside... Godammit it is so hard for me to explain the images that come to my mind. D:<
~Depes Hales~
Holy shit, please animate that. IT WOULD BE SOOOO SICK.
I understand exactly what you mean and it sounds awesome!!! PLEASE ANIMATE IT!!!
Thanks a lot for the review!
Hmm...
If you don't want to add more variety, how about making this song a loop? That would make this song the most popular of your submissions. But then again, it kinda works good as a loop already...
~Depes Hales~
:p
ye i know, but it wasn't something good to my opinion :p
it isn't something i really like :D ( the genre i mean then :D)
thanks ;-)
Very nice.
The song gets better as it goes along, nice job. Sorta builds up the excitement I think.
~Depes Hales~
thanks! ;-D
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